The 100 word challenge for grown ups, Week 18.
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Prompt – Lest we forget.
I wanted to do something different this week and use repetition and alliteration. A link with ‘Remember, remember’ from last week, extended. What do think, does it work for you?
Wounded World deeply damaged from fatal fighting.
Savage scars, brutal battles; death, destruction. Political power, consuming control driving dictators to totalitarian atrocious atrocities. Famine, families grieving, guns, perpetual pain. Wounded warriors, families fractured, nightmare, no glory gained.
Poppies worn, lest we forget, the ultimate price paid for our freedom,
Poppies worn, lest we forget, the value of freedom,
Poppies worn, lest we forget, those still suffering for our freedom,
Poppies worn, lest we forget, our contribution to future freedom,
Lives living, hopes healing, spirits soaring. Democracy delivering, actions approving, on-going opportunities, fulfilling futures, giving growing hope here and all around our wounded World.
(Not sure how well democracy is delivering currently, but there is the ideal!)
Gill's thoughts and reflections . . . 
So quick! Very powerful piece Gill – I have to think again now as you used one of my ideas.
Thanks Alison. Sorry I have used one of your ideas! I think it’s fine if more than one of us uses a similar angle . . . .
It’s very powerful.
Thank you Lisa and Alison, I think ‘powerful’ is appropriate/a good word to use in relation to writing about war. If we are not moved, challenged, confronted by the horrors we will not continue to seek and promote peace.
I like this & yes it does work! I love the repetition at the end. It gives it a great strength. The alliteration is effective too. I’m in awe that you were able to do it so quickly! Are you hiding in my study? 😉
i enjoy the challenges! Like Doug said last week sometimes the prompts inspire our writing more easily than others.
In assembly on Friday a Yr 4 class included the poem ‘Remember, remember.’ In my assembly today I braved shared my piece from last week, in the hope that my current enjoyment of the weekly challenges might help encourage/motivate them; we will see!
Today I knew a fimilar angle/style I could write in, but thought I would try to push my boundaries a little. I am glad you liked it! Thanks.
Powerful and of course, it’s 11/11 on Friday (11/11/11 actually). I’d forgotten about the poppies as I don’t live in England. It’s all abit depressing isn’t it?
11/11 and Rememberance Sunday . . . It’s sad yes. It makes me reflect on ‘freedom’. I am proud of my Grandfather’s decision to fight to keep Britain free and independent in WWI, despite being under age . . . I feel for those suffering, grieving and feeling hopeless in war torn places or as a result of war . . . I wish our World was free of wars. I wonder if it will ever happen. It has to be an ideal we strive for.
Gill, this is absolutely amazing, cleverly crafted and wonderfully written!
Very kind of you Sally-Jayne, thank you. Love the alliterations in your comment!
A-Ha! subtle, SJ. Remind me to look deeper into anything you say! 🙂
Gill, this is an incredibly moving piece of writing. The repetition adds real depth to it. Well done. You have achieved what I had hoped to but didn’t manage half so well.
Did you know, that for one second on Friday it will be
11.11.11.11.11
And another in the evening, provided your not using the 24 hour clock! And two similar moments next year too. And then not another for 89 years (I think?) If I was into astrology, I’d be marking that particular event in my diary.
Anna I am greatly touched by your feedback, thank you! Let’s keep an eye on the clock on Friday!
I’ve never written anything like this, Gill, so am impressed when someone does 🙂 Its not my style, but appreciate the craft! And so quick too. Sometimes I wonder whether there’s a race on, fingers hovering over the mouse buttons at midnight 😀
I have not written anything like this before either! Others are stretching their boundaries, so I thought I would try something different too . . . Time on Friday will be interesting. Thank you for your coments! Are you posting this week?
Very creative! As well as powerful! Thank you!
Thanks! Looking out for your entry!
Wow!!
I am taking this as a positive wow!?! Thanks!?!
A fabulous use of words and language Gill. Well done!
I am blushing! Thanks G
Moving and successful, Robin
Thank you Robin.
Repetition and alliteration can be tricky. I always have trouble with it, but I feel the deep meaning and the power in your words.
I’d ‘heard’ somewhere about this 100 word challenge …. this is the first time I have actually fallen across it. Yours is the 3rd post or 4th post I have read – from the one I tripped across at Susan Mann’s blog and then following the list.
What a fabulous piece of writing. I love alliteration, it’s one of my favourite ways of expressive writing from being a child.
The repetition allows you to keep coming back to the same points – and ultimately, what is it all for.
Great piece!
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Thank you for your positive feedback! I hope you will join us in writing?